Still in a rough draft but ss the topic says, I’d like to check whether these sentences are correct (and not grammatically clunky) before I write them out by hand…
感 謝 の気持 を込 めて、あなたたちに手紙 を書いています。
あなたたちのおかげで日本一周の旅はすばらしかった。
Also, if the second sentence follows the first, would it be correct to omit あなたたちの ？
Thanks in advance.
Good sentences overall 
some suggestions to make it more natural and polite:
気持 → 気持ち
あなたたちに → あなたがたに (あなた方 / more polite)
あなたたちのおかげで → 皆さんのおかげで (once again, sounds more polite)
すばらしかった → すばらしいものになりました
あなたたち is still correct though, these are just suggestions ^^
So with the revisions:
感謝の気持ちを込めて、あなたがたに手紙を書いています。
皆さんのおかげで日本一周の旅はすばらしいものになりました。
Thanks! I have more I’m going to write but I’m pretty sure the rest is correct. Hopefully it’s not going to take me forever to hand write it. but probably will.
頑張って！
Excuse me @MissMisc, would I use
皆さんの
if I was only referring to two or three people in one instance?
I have the impression (although I could be wrong) that’s what you’d use for a large group like a classroom… would it sound right if you were addressing a couple for example?
Hmm I’d think 皆さん is better for 3+ people, so for a couple maybe just use あなたたち / あなたがた (which pretty much specifies that it’s more than 1 person)
EDIT: To be even more specific and say something like “you both” there’s also (お)二人とも 
isn’t あなたたち a bit impolite?
I brought it up in the first post that あなたがた would be more polite to use^
Grammatically, there’s nothing wrong and it’s well done (I’d be totally happy if I receive a letter like this) 
あなたたちの sounds fine to me, but maybe in the second line, you could say their names if it’s only a couple or three peeps? It may feel nicer.
Like,
or later part, you could use
I think this one would sound more natural👌
手書きするの大変かもしれないけど、頑張って！(^^)/
@TofuguKanae 誠にありがとうございました。
@TofuguKanae @MissMisc This is what I ended up writing. Please excuse my ugly handwriting.
(By the way, Hiro prefers his name to be written in hiragana.)
Nice letter. Are you Australian by any chance?
I actually think your handwriting is great ^^ I really like the paper design too 
This is one of those types of letters that people cherish and keep forever, they’re going to love it =)
I wish my handwriting was as ugly as yours.
Looks perfect to me 
(Your handwriting is nicer than mine👌)
Yes, it’s an Australian native flora design.
I can write hiragana reasonably quickly but I went pretty slow with the kanji. Its pretty hard to make the kanji look elegant and consistent and I had to look up the stroke order for many.
Can I send you a Christmas card?
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