オレ粗大ゴミならおまえ危険物
オレそだい・ゴミならおまえ・きけんぶつ
If I belong in “oversized trash” / you must be “dangerous goods”!
Notes:
Congrats to @JazzFuneral for realizing that 粗大ゴミ here uses the colloquial meaning of a retired husband who’s become a nuisance around the house (a big lunk always getting in the way).
I’m going with my own translation this time, though (boooooo!). I was tempted, though, by what @LaVieQ eventually came up with.
I’m uncomfortable thinking of it as nasty words exchanged during an argument. Instead, I like to imagine a husband making a joke near the marked off areas for the various types of trash.
Current senryu challenge
Volume: Intense
208 勤務先電話をすれば夫休み
No hints today, a dictionary should suffice. At least I think I know what’s going on.
Remember to please use the spoiler tag with your translation attempts! Also, please include the reading in kana with your submission.
Everyone is encouraged to participate, no matter your level!
Here are the links to the 356 Japanese originals (spoiler free) and to the the spreadsheet with all the upcoming senryu as well as the translations to date.
“If I call him at work, they tell me he’s on vacation”
It still seems somewhat joking to me, like you’ve caught your spouse playing hookey or they asked someone to “tell her I’m not here”.
I think they would use 休憩中 or 昼休み or something if it was just a break. 休み can mean lots of things, of course, but bareword like this I think implies they are on holiday.
I suppose it could also be interpreted as the only time she calls in to his office is when he’s not at work (because she doesn’t want to talk to him for some reason) but that doesn’t seem to make as much sense to me.
Ah okay, I did notice the “intense” category, and my initial interpretation was something like that, but then I thought, why would they tell his own wife that he’s on vacation/absent when she would almost certainly know better? Or, “tell her I’m not here” would seem to cause more problems than it solves?
勤務先電話をすれば夫休み
きんむさき・でんわをすれば・おっとやすみ
If I call my husband’s office / they tell me he’s on vacation
Notes:
Went with my own interpretation again since there didn’t seem much disagreement
The implication seems to be that either he asked someone (who didn’t realize it was his wife) to “tell her I’m not here” or that she caught him playing hookey.
Here are the links to the 356 Japanese originals (spoiler free) and to the the spreadsheet with all the upcoming senryu as well as the translations to date.
The evidence of my fathers lies for the sake of soothing me are all over the house.
This one is really hard to explain without using a whole paragraph.
Translation Notes
家中 I’m taking the second meaning of “all around the house” rather than “the whole family” because I think that fits better with で.
だます I’m going with the second definition of “to soothe, to humor” but it’s in the passive form, and てやる is basically てあげる, “do a favor”. So, “was soothed (for me/someone by someone, as a favor).”
Passive is hard. My main example for trying to get the tone was 乗らせてやる (let me/you/someone ride).
Ultimately, I think this is more a poignant sentence rather than an accusative one.
Labored 5-7-5 construct:
うちじゅうでだまされてやるちちのうそ
Our entire household / taken in entirely by / father’s lies and fibs
Straightforward translation that perhaps preserves better the “Heartfelt” pathos of the original:
The entire family / was deceived by them: / Dad’s lies
やる and 自分 are the thing that constantly confuse me, can change direction widely depending on the context…
Another very non-literal interpretation:
The entire family played nice
Pretending to be fooled
By dad’s fibs
The big choice is assuming that てやる means てあげる, so it would be the family doing the favor of being だまされる for the sake of the dad. Playful/lighthearted vibe. But if it’s true I’m not sure why 家中で instead of 家中が though.
Also I assumed that the viewpoint is from inside the family, because if it was an objective external viewpoint, it would be あげる maybe ? Thus “dad’s fibs” and not “the father’s fibs”. But again my understanding of やる is low…
Yay ! The coinflip やる landed on the right side for me this time !
I also just noticed that だまされてやる is present tense, but my translation make it look like it’s a one time thing that happened in the past, so it’s probably not right either.
Wife points out that these are mostly サラリーマン川柳, so important to recognize working for a large company, workaholic, long commute, complex and hierarchical work place relationships etc.
[spoiler]So I imagine they are going along with some fib (like giving up cigarettes or drinking) to avoid causing any more stress.
But my wife says it could be about a golf score or anything — they just pretend to believe him.[/spoiler]
If you want a REAL challenge, though, try to translate しみじみ編 — I tried “heartfelt volume” but I don’t think that’s exactly right.
My daughter says it’s like trying to explain a color to someone who’s never seen it:
I’d say しみじみ is usually more on the quiet/slow/negative side- like しみじみと考える、しみじみ反省する、etc. it can be used positively like しみじみ感謝した、but it still feels really different than “heartfelt”
Like I wouldn’t translate “a heartfelt thank you” to 「しみじみ感謝しています」- it’s not wrong, but I feel like 「心から感謝しています」is more fitting in nuance unless there’s other context provided.
I’d describe しみじみ as feelings seeping slowly into the depths of your heart. Like how you notice someone’s true kindness after they’ve passed away- or ponder about someone’s words when you lay awake at night.
Don’t get me wrong, it can be used positively too! It just doesn’t feel as innately positive as “heartfelt” does (even though I know you can say “heartfelt sympathy” etc)