(The increasingly less) Daily senryu thread

「じかんよ」と にどねするつま おきるおれ

waking up to
“it’s time!” as my wife
goes back to sleep

This one was a little tough fitting it into a 4-5-4 in English; a bit of information had to be lost. Here’s a 5-7-5 that’s a bit more of a direct translation (at least, as far as I understand the poem, haha. Could be wrong!):

waking up to my
wife saying “hey, it’s time!” as
she goes back to sleep

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