I’m doing something kinda hard for my level, which is writing a song. I think it’s a great workout for my brain.
I’m having trouble with a lot of stuff, the main ones are omitted subjects/topics and sentences joined by て
First, can I use the progressive (or any) tense in the first part of the sentence, like
空が晴れていて、息を深くする。(meant as “The sky is clearing, I take a deep breath”)
Second, the subject here is 空, but then the second part is about me, not the sky anymore. Will a Japanese reader/listener understand that?
I put 僕は at the beginning of the song. Will the rest make sense?
For an example:
(The sun is setting, I’m heading/going out | Here I mention “I”)
(I take my keys, turn off the lights | Makes sense since it’s all me doing stuff)
(It’s starting to rain, I unlock the car | Here I put rain as the subject, then it’s about me again. That’s what I’m unsure about)
(I really want it… that kind of feeling | Bonus question: Can I do that? without putting が after 感じ which would be ugly)
Same with these two:
稲妻は閃いて、空を照らす。(Here the topic is 稲妻)
速さがほしくて、アクセルを踏む。(Here I’m talking about what “I” am doing, but I don’t change the topic again. I don’t know if that’s good or not.
Sorry for the long post
Can I put a tense in the first part of a sentence connected with て?
Can I shift between subjects or topics without mentioning it in the context of a song? Especially in a て sentence.
Can I invert stuff without the particles like 本当にほしい。。。そんな感じ。?